ADVERTISING DRINK (LEMON JUICE)
The first part: seen two men who were thirsty in the middle of the desert, and one man found a bag of water in the sand, we see him squeeze the water bag, when a drop of water will come out of the bag, temnnya call and finally a drop of water it falls under the sand.
The second part: we see one of them having patamorgana, he saw his stomach like a bag full of water, and finally he shoot his stomach and finally the theme was angry and chased him.
into three parts: the two men are severe thirst, and to see a mother nursing her child jaguar, and the two men thought to drink milk mempunyi holding the jaguars, the two men were undercover into a jaguar, and the two men approached the mother jaguar the parent and the two men chasing jaguars
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(LEMON JUICE)
The first part: seen two men who were thirsty in the middle of the desert, and one man found a bag of water in the sand. We see him squeeze the water bag, when a drop of water come out of the bag, his friend calls and finally a drop of water falls under the sand.
The second part: we see one of them is having patamorgana, he see his stomach like a bag full of water, and finally he shoots his stomach and finally the friend is angry and chases him.
into three parts: the two men are severe thirst, and to see a mother nursing her jaguar child, and the two men think of drinking milk. The two men are undercover into a jaguar, and the two men approached the mother jaguar.
Ok, I think you should be faithful in using tenses. If you want to use present tense, use it. If you want to use past tense, use it for the whole text.